Saturday, February 6, 2010

Sharmagne Leland-St.John

I SING YOU THE MORNING

my love, I sing you the morning
as sunlight drenches the Tokyo sky
and small brown wrens gather to fly
while I, in a silken kimono
with chrysanthemum sash
gaze through my window
at a porcelain sky the colour of ash,

in my mind’s eye, I picture you oceans away
and thus, erotically, I begin my day
as I evoke the memory of the thrust of your hips
yours is the name that escapes the darkness
of my parted lips yes, I, in a blue silken kimono
with chrysanthemum sash
gaze at a sky the colour of ash

24 comments:

  1. This is a mind that sees love in all around. I was moved by the line that spoke to the "yes". You can feel the distance and the memories take me back in my own mind to a love that is far away but not forgotten. Beautiful.

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  2. A very Beautiful and romantic poem~~:)

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  3. This is a lovely multilayered song.
    Her descriptions paint
    delicate visuals of oriental culture
    then draw us
    into her heated loneliness.
    wonderful.

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  4. The images in this poem are unique and vivid. The off center rhyme scheme creates frshness, and the repetition of certain elements, such as the sash and the sky color create a nice symmetry. A great choice for a Valentine's Day contest.

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  5. This piece is so romantic and is so beautifully crafted so that the images are almost tangible. It's a wonderful poem of love and desire.

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  6. from Mary Jo Balistreri:

    This is a perfect valentine poem, sensuous, luscious images full of desire, and just a hint of loneliness we all carry, hoping that someone special will love us, and we, them. Beautifully crafted, the poet has sung a personal and intimate song.

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  7. Simply beautiful. The unspoken images of the Japanese landscape and the narrator wearing a kimono - blue - symbolic for sadness, loneliness are bittersweet. If the two lovers were together, then all will be perfect, but apart the day's beginning starts the only way it can. The words bring out the sense of possibility and expectation.

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  8. from Karen:

    This poet has wonderful abilities that tantalize the senses through vibrant guided imagery offering the reader an invitation to feel what intangible, heartfelt love is all about as feelings cease to fade creating true romantic appeal. Well done!

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  9. I enjoyed reading this lyrical and evocative poem; the title adds a nice element.

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  10. I am only 14, so some of this poem is outside my experience, but I like the fact that it rhymes and yet still somehow the poem is not silly, but serious. I like it that an adult writer has a rhyme scheme.

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  11. This piece is beautifully written in a sing-song fashion that evokes memories of my own. In that respect it's a universal piece that anyone can identify with. Wonderful!

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  12. from Phil Turner:

    I Sing You the Morning is a very good poem. Its words are controlled and accurate, yet contain deep passion. This is obviously composed by someone who knows the Japanese warrior haiku -- their best work was often an observation of the transcendental calmness of the acts of killing and making love!

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  13. Entrant #5 - I feel the passion I Sing the Morning expresses. It's soft smoth words makes this poem very emotional.

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  14. A masterful use of natural imagery to at once depict the mystery of earth/sky/light/sea and to mine the landscape it has created for the subterranean treasure...steaming volcanic passion! Woohoo!! Brava!

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  15. Wow, how beautiful! Come back to her, please., In a time of war, we forget about the loved ones it effects. Whether friend or foe, it is all about love. Thank you for this, it will effect me, for weeks to come

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  16. from Sid Sutton:

    I very much enjoyed the poem of Entrant
    number 5. The visual and emotional effects of this poem were very powerful. The poem evoked strong images and deep feelings.

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  17. Rather like the inner rhyme scheme or pattern. Sexiest poem I've read without being porno! Two thumbs straight up on this one!

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  18. What a gorgeous, sexy piece of work. Each word is a vivid picture on a backdrop of longing. Strong and feminine. I remember that place very well...

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  19. nice piece. thank you for taking the time to conspire with such vivid and sensuous recollections! only problem is, now I cant get the cherry blossoms and lotus pedals out of my mind.

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  20. This is a wonder ful merging of the delicacy of Asian poetic imagery and sensuality. The poet avoide the usual trite snares with wonderful word usage like "a porcelain sky the colour of ash"

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  21. from Sharmagne Leland-St.John:

    Thank you to everyone who voted for I Sing You The Morning!

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  22. from Phil Turner:

    A most deserved win! The poem is exquisite -- worthy of being read over and over.

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